want to share my verse... comment plz ^-)

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LIFE

What is this whole life about?
Is it about finding something worth?
How do you know whether you found that or not yet?
Probably if it's about finding something you feel different when you find it!
But if it's not about finding, when what? Is it about doing something different.

The sun in the sky is saying goodbye
And nobody cares a lot
The world is indifferent so why shouldn't I
Treat everyone else as a thought

It’s neither a good one or really bad
Most horrible being just that
As soon as I close my restless green eyes
In no time at all it shall dye

The world no longer exists in my head
So what's going on with my soul?
The feeling of rock which's as hard as the black
Night brought by that horrible moan

The night's so deep, everlasting, and vile
It's useless to praise or to blame
For ever, for good and for sure you're mine
N' serve me that gift of the fame

Did anyone really wanted that end
I am sure the fool is unborn
Did someone deserve that with no chance to mend
At all, ever, really, at all

Stanislav 2001 (c)

[d.]

Is it about finding something worth? - наверное нельзя обрывать фразу на worth - either worthy, or worth something

[trix]

"Did anyone really wanted that end"
Grammar?

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2d.
i'll think about that... but consider
Is it about finding something worth...? (doing, seeing, thinking, etc)?

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thanks for grammar
for sure it sounds better
"Has anyone really wanted that end"

[d.]

In no time at all it shall dye - dIe? or dye what?

[trix]

when what = THEN what?
neither....NOR
"As soon as I close my restless green eyes
In no time at all it shall dye" Dye the green eyes?

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2 d.
die
thanks ^-)

[OlgaMax]

"But if it's not about finding, when what?"
I would say "then" instead of "when" :))

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2 trix
thanks for NOR
the world dies ^-)
nothing to do with the eyes ^-)

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thanks for THEN(seconded by OlgaMax)