Укажите на ошибки, начинающему изучать правописание . gen.

[Nobody__]

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing because I am extremely interested in English Bay College, and I appreciate this opportunity to provide further background information in support of my application for entrance to English Bay College. First of all let me introduce myself, my name is Anatolii O. Malyi, I‘m a 24 year-old, Ukrainian. Please accept my application for study and work permit because I want to improve my English in English Bay College in Vancouver and get some good experience in hospitality business, since it is a well-known fact that Canada is highly developed in tourist area.

I am very interested in the hospitality business and tourism, because I have traveled a lot and visited many places with a various attitude to tourists, also people from different countries come to visit my native town Chernivtsi. Today the hospitality business in Ukraine is developing intensely, the reason for this is the next European football championship Euro cup 2012, which will be held in Ukraine as well. So, I would like to get a relevant experience in this business and of course to improve my knowledge of English.

English Bay College has its own culture, identity and way of life which are totally different from the Ukrainian respectively European culture. To get in contact with a lot of different people and their culture and get to know them personally would be a very important stage in my life to develop my personality and broaden my horizons. Therefore English Bay College will be a great opportunity to develop my personality, get in contact with many interesting people, get to know about their way of life and it will be a great opportunity to improve my English.

I am quite sociable person and enjoy working in teams, I am friendly, easy-going, cheerful, responsible. As a matter of fact I always try to come up with something new.

It would be beneficial for me to attend this course in your College because I am aware about high educational standards of the Canadian educational system, and especially in the English Bay College where education system includes studying and practice. I believe that it gives great opportunity for students to learn the sphere of hospitality business very well.

Duration of my study and work experience will be 6 months. I have enough funds to cover my living expenses during the study period and have strong intention to comply with the Canadian rules and regulations.

Finally I can say that I look forward to joining this program in order to prove my abilities and gain new skills, and I believe the course in the English Bay College will be such a great opportunity for me and therefore I will be patiently waiting for a positive reply.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I am looking forward to your response.

Yours faithfully
Anatolii Malyi

Letter of Support

Dear Sir or Madame:

I am very pleased to recommend Anatolii O.Malyi for admission to your university program, I would like to express my strong support of Anatolii and his desire to attend the English Bay College for the Study Canada program.
Anatolii Malyi is an extraordinary employee and a vital member of the team. Anatolii has demonstrated excellent managerial and decision making skills. He is attentive to tasks and works tirelessly to achieve the goals of the department. He is an extremely positive and dependable employee, and performs his duties in an extremely timely and conscientious manner. While his performance of the given tasks has been nothing less than excellent, Anatolii has also become a close friend to many of us. I have been Anatolii is direct supervisor. I have found him to be a very pleasant, generous person who is never afraid to take on a challenging task. Anatolii is an independent, self directed person who is able to communicate effectively and meet even the most demanding challenges. He was always willing to offer his assistance and had an excellent rapport with the many constituents served by our office including clients, employers, and other professional organizations. Anatolii willingly accepts new assignments and offers to help wherever he can. Anatolii is a hard-working self-starter who is highly respected, both as a person and a professional, by colleagues, employees, suppliers, and customers as well.
I feel very confident that he will be extremely successful in all his future endeavors
If you have any questions, please fell free to contact me at any time.

Sincerely

[Anna-London]

Не поэл... Это вот такой объем сесть и отредактировать?! И что нам за это будет?

[Alexander Oshis]

Ошибка №1: после слов "Укажите ошибки" запятая не нужна.

[Nobody__]

Вот я так и думал что это все кома (будь она неладна). Єто же паутина, а вдруг кому то скучно возьмет да и поковыряться в тексте.

[Gennady1]

2,48 стр ))))

[Nobody__]

Ой извините запятая а не *кома*

[Anna-London]

А украинские буквы зачем?

[Nobody__]

Ну так я же хохол как же без этого. (так норм?)

[Alexander Oshis]

Я бы помог, но там работы больше чем на полчаса, а сегодня у меня нету времени...

[Евгения_Е]

на первый взгляд, перед and запятые не ставятся!это тебе любой англичанин скажет))) and ставится вместо запятой!

[Nobody__]

Понял. Спасибо)))

[KOMno3uTOP]

respectively European - no good. relatively (?) predominantly (тоже брехня, но звучт)
get to know their way of life OR learn about.....
Aware of ...
ducation system includes both theory and practice
sphere лучше убрать. hospitality business - проще - лучше

i have been Anatoliy's direct supervisor

есть еще, но это то, что бросилось в глаза с первого взгляда. стилистические ошибочки
запятые есть лишние - есть, где нет. however например xxx; however, yyy, или xxx, however, yyy - они это дело любят.
А вообще как для не нейтив спикера, пойдет, лучше пусть видят ошибки, чем то, что это писал кто-то другой

[KOMno3uTOP]

Евгения_Е,

перед and запятые не ставятся!это тебе любой англичанин скажет))) and ставится вместо запятой!

перед and иногда ставятся запятые

[Евгения_Е]

композитор, я тоже так думала, но один англичанин мне исправил текст и сказал, что запятые перед and не ставятся

вы будете спорить с носителем языка?

[sand28]

Евгения_Е http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Serial_comma

[sand28]

или http://ru.wikipedia.org/wiki/Серийная_запятая

[KOMno3uTOP]

Конечно буду! MLA формат допускает использование запятой именно так. К слову сказать, это может быть более распространено в американском английском.
А что, если человек разговаривает на английском, то он автоматически умный? Я тупых американцев, ровно как и умных встречаю каждый день. Кстати, в колледже у меня по английскому твердая четверка(В), в то время, как некоторые носители этот предмет вообще заваливают.

[sledopyt]

a few points:

Dear MADAM OR Sir: or Madam,

I am writing TO EXPRESS MY because I am extremely interested in THE English Bay College, and I appreciate this opportunity to provide further SOME background information in support of my application for ACCEPTANCE INTO THE ... (specify the exact programme name here) PROGRAMME AT entrance to YOUR SCHOOL English Bay College. First of all, (comma) let me introduce myself. (start new sentence) My name is Anatolii O. Malyi, I‘m I AM a 24 yearS old, AND I LIVE IN Ukrain ian. Please accept my application for A study and work permit IN CANADA. (i'd put this sentence somewhere at the beginning; also, not sure if both study and work permits can be granted at the same time. check on that) because I WOULD LIKE want to improve my English LANGUAGE SKILLS WHILE LEARNING THE ASPECTS OF HOSPITALITY BUSINESS AT in THE English Bay College in Vancouver. and get some good experience in hospitality business, since It is a well-known fact that Canada'S HOSPITALITY INDUSTRY IS ONE OF THE STRONGEST IN THE WORLD. is highly developed in tourist area.

I am very interested in the TOURISM AND hospitality business and tourism, because I have traveled a lot and visited many places with a various attitude to tourists, (not sure what you mean). also people from different countries come to visit my native town Chernivtsi. (what are you trying to convey here?) Today, (comma) the hospitality business in Ukraine is RAPIDLY developing intensely, the reason for this is IN PREPARATION FOR the UPCOMING next European Football Championship - Euro Cup 2012 TO BE , which will be held in Ukraine. as well. So,THEREFORE, I would like to get a relevant experience in this business and, of course, to improve my knowledge of English LANGUAGE SKILLS.

[Nobody__]

Спасибо всем огромное!!!!. После первых коментов думал вообще щас забанят, или еще че нить в этом роде (объем то и правда не маленький), а тут как ребенку все разжевали и почти накормили)))))

sledopyt - жжешь, я вообще в коматозе. Таких четких указаний по исправлению ошибок мне еще никто не делал )))) Еще раз спасибо))))

[AMOR 69]

Грамматических и стилистических ошибок немало, но текст прекрасный, и я бы не помелял ни одной буквы. Не надо стесняться неточностей. Вы же едете учиться, а не учить. Если хотите, ошибки - самое ценное в Вашем тексте. Это не недостатки, а достоинство в данном случае. Поверьте мне, тот, кому этот текст предназначен, оценит его по достоинству, потому что написано от себя, а не "как положено".